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Date: 2018/11/05 20:54 By: bulldust Status: Admin  
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In SWFL we have an entire season of rain. In the summertime, without fail, we get daily rainfall. The trick is avoiding the afternoon downpours.

Then, as soon as the rains stop, the snowfuckers arrive. They arrive en masse, like locusts descending upon us. Can’t get into our favorite pizza joint for six months because there is a forty-five minute wait due to these winners sucking down all our cheesy goodness. Walmart is OUT of food because these winners rampage through the place buying everything that is not nailed down.

Don’t tell me that they are good for the economy. I find no correlation. If you can afford to spend six months off from work, you can afford to go to Publix. Get the hell out of my ghetto supermarket fuckers. But they don’t shop in the ritzy places. They leach off of our discount stores. I fear my next trip to Dollar Tree. It’s going to be snowfucker hell.

Downpour, yes, I’d like it to rain all season so these asshats have a shitty vacay. I would like a downpour to wash away the bastards.

As far as the cap, “Downpour” goes. It is a post-apocalyptic tale of a broken marriage and nuns. It chronicles a couple’s struggles to survive a world that is quickly being submerged.

The plot is okay. The grammar is only missing maybe one hyphen and some commas here and there. I think the flow suffers a little by the flashbacks that are not immediately obvious until you are a few lines into them. Also the following:

‘I can’t protect you here,’ he’d said.

For a moment, I thought we flashed back again, but it was Lisa quoting Robbie. I had to reread it a few times catch what was going on.

The dysfunction of the relationship parallels the misery of collapsed society. What one expects to be safe and comforting turns into danger and pain. It is a harsh reality they negotiate.

Overall, I liked the emotional content of the cap. It was a distinct downer and intentionally so. However, I can’t get past that it’s just another post-apocalyptic cap. The circumstances were not anything unique. It could have been set in any war-torn part of the planet today. I’m not damning it for that alone, but I feel that it’s missing something. So I have to say no. Maybe Rocks has a different opinion.
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