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PRODIGAL DAUGHTER_rejected
Date: 2018/10/01 15:40 By: deplancher Status: Admin  
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Dear Monsieur Cusomano,

Many thanks for your recent submission, Prodigal Daughter, for our consideration.

It comes close. You weave a coherent story line. But some things happen that break our concentration, our willingness to believe.

Par example:

Are cults so easy to infiltrate? So convenient the one sought is also the one who drives by and picks up the dusty protagonist. Hmmm...

Man's ear is sliced off. Yet he moves on, buys a train ticket. It is not mentioned again. Monkey likes you and what you do but he says the final third is kinda shruggable.

The scenes with Magnus roaring on with his vivid and delusional description of the impending doom end of all things is effective and possibly the strongest aspect of this piece, imho.

You know we know TQR is a crusty, decrepit house. Keep knocking anyway.

Not this time, mon ami.

Merci beaucoup,


G. DePlancher
The Floor - TQR
www.tqrstories.com

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Hold Steady. Stay in the Light.
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Sent while levitating from my own Bright Cloud.

DeP
A Bluelight Dancer/Not a Pocketbook Romancer
of The Floor
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