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NEIGHBORS_rejected
Date: 2018/05/01 01:01 By: deplancher Status: Admin  
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Bonjour, Dean Grondo:

Thank you for your submission for our consideration.

Neighbours is well done in the sense of organization and dialogue. Its pace and content, though, Monsieur Grondo, leave the Monkey impatient and...impatient. I agree with him.

Neighbours introduces a reader to a number of characters over the course of a relatively short piece. Perhaps too many? Maybe. If the overall intent is to demonstrate the cohesiveness of neighbours despite obvious and marked differences in personalities, skill sets, and abilities, I think it succeeds on some level.

Unfortunately, such an exploration on its own doesn't quite provide enough depth to keep our interest.

Best wishes in placing it with another publication. Neighbours is not for TQR.

Merci,


G. DePlancher
The Floor - TQR
www.tqrstories.com

Sent while levitating from my own Bright Cloud.

DeP
A Bluelight Dancer/Not a Pocketbook Romancer
of The Floor
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